Ani May Queen

Very nice, I like the characters and the dialouge, seems very good so far. However, I have to say the last paragraph was a tad, well unpleasent. Dump the info ...

Wow. I've got to tell you up front, I really enjoyed reading this. It was extremely hard to find anything to really critique! Here are the few things I spotted: ...

I'll try to review most of it, but I'll do the prologue first. The beginning paragraph I like. It's got lots of good detail. I can get a nice image ...

A " glimmer of potential"?! This is a God damn goldmine! I would love for you to continue this. Your diologue and narative is really good. The only thing I'd ...

Hey, super awesome story. I really have no critque, I really just enjoyed this a lot. It's nice to read something that's suposed to be light and silly for once. ...

First off, great story! I love the opening, it hooked me right off. Also, the ending part with Qatar's “I make it my business to know my enemies.” really makes ...

Great start, it sounds one of those movies were you see some old wise man reading a prophsey out of a old, large book. I didn't really like the fact ...

Hehe, this is really great. I suck at reviews so don't expect me to tell you anything helpful. I just wanted to say that I read this and that I ...

Good description and a good hook? English teachers must love you. The description is AMAZING and the opening really sucks you into the rest of it. Please continue, I'd love ...

Hehe, they made me chuckle. Actualy I didn't chuckle, I just smiled and felt happy but you get the picture. Very nice and cute, short poems are always fun. It's ...

In an ordinary world, through an ordinary town, in which there was an ordinary street, there walked a…not so ordinary woman. I like the opening, its different and not clichéd. ...

Woah...that's a little freaky... :shock: But very good. I like it a lot. The first part is a little hard to read, you might want to break it up into ...

Awsome, I love it. I like the whole element thing with the wind and fire going on. A little confusing, but then again we're not really supposed to get it ...

Very Cool, I love what Ness's character. The purple eyes are extremly exotic and strange, adding to her coolness. The cliff-hanger is awsome. Good going. :D